2009年考研英語40篇大作文演練與名師點評

第三七篇

　　37 Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the pictures;

　　2. interpret the meaning of the pictures;

　　3. make your comments.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　這是一個非常好的題目，我們可以這樣來構(gòu)思：描述圖表——分析其中道理——推廣到生活中——采取行動。In the first picture, a young girl poured a whole barrel of water on a little flower in order to help it grow more quickly. In the second picture, the flower withered before long, and the child was crying—she wondered why things should be that way.

　　Trees need water to grow up, and flowers need water to bloom. But too much water can no longer be helpful—it can only hinder their growth and even kill them. Whenever we water trees or flowers, we should do it according to the natural principle.

　　Actually, whenever we take action in our daily life, we should follow the law of nature. It is understandable for us to dream of quick success and then take immediate actions to turn it into reality, but we should not be too hasty. If we are always in a hurry, quality often suffers, making it more difficult for us to attain the aim.

　　Up until now, we come to understand the meaning of the old saying “Haste makes waste” better. We should break our great plan into small parts, analyze the feature of each part and carry it out step by step—when we follow the natural pace of development, success will soon be in our hands. 本文共分為四段。第一段描述兩幅圖畫，突出了其中的對比。第二段分三句來闡述畫中的道理。前兩句話說樹與花都需要水，但過多的水不但無益，反倒有害。最后一句話說澆水要符合自然規(guī)律。第三段共三句話。第一句說在日常生活中，我們應(yīng)遵守自然規(guī)律。第二句說夢想快速成功然后立即采取行動是可以理解的，但是不能太著急。第三句話說如果總是匆匆忙忙，質(zhì)量肯定會受影響，達到目的就更難了。最后一段兩句話，第一句話說我們最終更好地理解了“欲速則不達”這句話。第二句話說了我們正確的做法——將計劃拆分成小的部分，分析每部分的特點，而后一步步地付諸實施。該文由淺入深，環(huán)環(huán)相扣，漸入佳境，源自宏觀上全局的安排和微觀上語言的處理。從分析畫本身的道理，說到我們的日常生活，再到我們處事的具體做法，非常自然，也使人感到親切。

　　在語言上，首段采用了兩句簡潔的描述，突出顯示了對比。次段首句采用的是平行結(jié)構(gòu)。次句用破折號表示遞進。第三段中第二句采用了表轉(zhuǎn)折的并列句，第三句采用了條件狀語從句。第四段第二句采用了平行的動賓詞組，而后使用破折號，最后使用了時間狀語從句。