2009年考研英語(yǔ)40篇大作文演練與名師點(diǎn)評(píng)

第三十篇

　　30 Study the following table carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the table;

　　2. interpret the trend;

　　3. make your comments.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　指標(biāo)名稱198919972002每萬(wàn)人口醫(yī)院床位數(shù) (張)22.8 23.5 23.2 每萬(wàn)人口醫(yī)生數(shù) (人)15.2 16.1 14.7 人均衛(wèi)生總費(fèi)用支出 (元)76.7 186.4 442.5 審題包括兩個(gè)部分，一個(gè)是讀圖畫或圖表，一個(gè)是看提綱。成功的審題就是將兩者有機(jī)地結(jié)合起來(lái)，確定文章的最終布局。這道題還是屬于圖表題中的表格題，比較特殊。表格中共有三個(gè)變量，應(yīng)該看出來(lái)有一個(gè)變量，即人均衛(wèi)生總費(fèi)用支出是大幅增長(zhǎng)的，而另兩個(gè)變量，即每萬(wàn)人口醫(yī)院床位數(shù)和每萬(wàn)人口醫(yī)生數(shù)，是基本未變的。第一段的工作就是描述這兩個(gè)趨勢(shì)。第二段中闡釋這一趨勢(shì)，就是要重點(diǎn)突出這一對(duì)比。第三段做出評(píng)論，對(duì)于一種不能令人滿意的現(xiàn)狀甚至令人擔(dān)憂的社會(huì)問(wèn)題，大多數(shù)時(shí)候最好的選擇就是寫改進(jìn)或解決問(wèn)題的辦法了。From the table we can see clearly that total medical expenses per capita rose from 76.5 yuan in 1989 to 186.4 yuan in 1997 and then to 442.5 yuan in 2002. In the same period, the number of hospital beds every 10,000 people and the number of doctors every 10,000 people stayed at almost the same level.

　　This table illustrates clearly the discrepancy between the soaring medical expenses and the unsatisfactory hospital facilities. On the one hand, the money spent on medical care has climbed sharply in the past decade. According to the National Bureau of Statistics, the medical expense has soared to 7.3 percent of the total expenses of urban residents, and 6.0 of that of rural residents in 2003. On the other hand, the limited scale of hospitals cannot meet the needs of our people. It is true that we have more advanced medical instruments, but the numbers of beds and doctors have changed little over the last decade. We all know that timely medical operation is extremely important in many cases, but how can we ensure it without finding a bed first?

　　To improve the present situation we have a long way to go. In the first place, we have to standardize medical practices, regulate the drug circulation and perfect the medical care system to bring down the medical expenses. In the second place, we should build more first�瞔lass hospitals, expand the scale of present hospitals and turn out more medical talents. If all of these can be accomplished our people will surely receive better medical care and live a happier life. 本文共分三段。第一段兩句話，第一句話以常見的句型From the table we can see clearly that開始，描寫了人均衛(wèi)生總費(fèi)用支出逐年攀升的事實(shí)。而第二句以In the same period強(qiáng)勢(shì)開頭，描述了其它兩個(gè)變量基本不變(stay at almost the same level)的情形，概括性很強(qiáng)。

　　第二段首句對(duì)上面的數(shù)字變化進(jìn)行總結(jié)，突出了discrepancy(差異)一詞，一方面是高漲(soar)的醫(yī)療費(fèi)用，另一方面是不能令人滿意的醫(yī)院設(shè)施，而后分兩方面來(lái)說(shuō)。第一方面分兩句話，先說(shuō)醫(yī)療費(fèi)用劇烈攀升。而后舉出國(guó)家統(tǒng)計(jì)局的數(shù)字，是醫(yī)療費(fèi)用占城市和農(nóng)村居民支出的百分比，很有說(shuō)服力。如果我們沒有確鑿的數(shù)據(jù)，就不要這樣寫，切忌胡編亂造。另一方面的描述共分三句話，先說(shuō)醫(yī)院有限的規(guī)模無(wú)法滿足人民的需求。第二句相當(dāng)于although引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句，但是語(yǔ)氣更強(qiáng)一些——我們雖然醫(yī)療器械有所改進(jìn)，但床位數(shù)和醫(yī)生數(shù)無(wú)甚改觀。最后一句話說(shuō)我們都知道及時(shí)的手術(shù)很重要，可如果連床位都沒有怎能保證手術(shù)呢？

　　第三段寫改進(jìn)的辦法。首句是總括句，說(shuō)我們?nèi)沃氐肋h(yuǎn)，而后分兩方面來(lái)說(shuō)。第一方面說(shuō)采取措施(規(guī)范醫(yī)療操作、調(diào)控藥品流通和優(yōu)化醫(yī)療保健體系)來(lái)降低醫(yī)療費(fèi)用。第二方面說(shuō)通過(guò)建立更多的一流醫(yī)院、擴(kuò)充現(xiàn)有醫(yī)院的規(guī)模和培養(yǎng)更多的醫(yī)學(xué)人才來(lái)解決當(dāng)前的矛盾。最后一句是結(jié)語(yǔ)——如果所有這些都能實(shí)現(xiàn)，人們一定能接受更好的醫(yī)療保健，過(guò)上更幸福的生活。 要想寫好一篇文章，首先是審題——對(duì)圖表(圖畫)和提綱所構(gòu)成的語(yǔ)境的把握一定要準(zhǔn)確。其次是具體到段落，在遣詞造句上一定要考究，要多下功夫。平時(shí)多積累，多寫作是很重要的，因?yàn)槟軌虺蔀榭碱}的潛在主題不超過(guò)兩百個(gè)，很多詞、詞組與句型出現(xiàn)的幾率更要高得多，所以平時(shí)的積累和操練至關(guān)重要。