2009年考研英語40篇大作文演練與名師點(diǎn)評(píng)

第十八篇

　　18 Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the picture;

　　2. interpret the meaning of the picture;

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　該文可分三段來寫。第一段描述圖畫，第二段從正反兩個(gè)方面對畫中敘述的道理進(jìn)行闡釋，第三段作結(jié)。A mountaineer is climbing along the main road when he comes to a crossroads. He is wondering whether to choose the small track to go to the summit. Besides the picture there is a sentence: the shortcut is often the worst choice. This picture sets me thinking for a long time. It is the instant reaction for a person to seek a shortcut when facing problems or difficulties. Then how could it be the worst choice?

　　Rough is the road that leads to greatness. In real life, if a person wants to make great achievements, it is unquestionable that he has to sustain years and years of hard struggle. A scientist has to make thousands of experiments so as to make inventions and break�瞭hroughs, and a painter, a singer and a sportsman has to practice again and again to achieve perfection. As for a student, if he wants to attain his goal in life, he has to choose his own road at a very young age and hold on to it until he finally succeeds. On the contrary, many people get used to choosing the shortcut: some of them try hard to attain goals through “special relationships”, some of them take advantages of the loopholes in rules and regulations to make personal profits and others attribute success to sheer luck. In many cases, when people depend too much on the external factors, they lose the impetus to constantly improve themselves, and success remains a dream.

　　How long will it take for a person to turn his dream into reality? How much does he have to pay before he finally realizes that in most cases shortcuts are dead ends? It is a pity that many people will never realize that such roads lead to nowhere before it is too late. 第一段首先對圖畫進(jìn)行了描述，之后說遇到問題或困難時(shí)想找捷徑是自然反應(yīng)，那么它又怎么會(huì)是最壞的選擇呢？這樣就以問題作為過渡句，對下文的解釋做了鋪墊。

　　第二段是全文最重要的部分，分為兩方面來說。前四句講第一方面。第一句說通向偉大的道路都是崎嶇的。第二句說如果一個(gè)人想要做出成就，就需要多年的艱苦奮斗。第三句與第四句是舉例。后兩句是第二部分。第五句說許多人慣于選擇捷徑，并在冒號(hào)后進(jìn)行了舉例。最后一句說在許多情況下，當(dāng)人們過多地依賴于外部因素時(shí)，他們將失去不斷提升自己的動(dòng)力，而成功就只能是一個(gè)夢想。

　　最后一段是總結(jié)。前兩句是連續(xù)的問句，力度很強(qiáng)。第一句問一個(gè)人要多長時(shí)間才能將夢想變?yōu)楝F(xiàn)實(shí)？這呼應(yīng)了整個(gè)第二段。第二句問他付出多少才能明白在多數(shù)情況下捷徑都是死胡同？這是呼應(yīng)第二段的第二部分。第三句說遺憾的是許多人將永遠(yuǎn)無法明白這些路無法通達(dá)，直到太遲。這句話表面是對上一句話的回答，實(shí)際上是將問題的解釋與現(xiàn)實(shí)情況的描述相結(jié)合，為全文劃上了句號(hào)。該句中以動(dòng)詞詞組lead to nowhere表達(dá)與名詞詞組dead ends相近的意思，值得品味。另外大家注意學(xué)習(xí)before的用法，相當(dāng)?shù)湫�。清晰、合理的模式的運(yùn)用會(huì)令讀者認(rèn)為作者對英語寫作有著正確的基本認(rèn)識(shí)，這包括段落的總體安排、段間的呼應(yīng)與段內(nèi)的組織。而在大的框架確立之后，如果不是考試等“有控制的寫作”，大的模式都不會(huì)相對固定，寫作就變得更為靈活多變。近幾年大家漸漸感覺在業(yè)界內(nèi)英語寫作的地位日漸彰顯，做business leader尤其如此，看來此趨勢必將更盛。有想到美國、加拿大等國留學(xué)的同學(xué)們一定注意，清晰的邏輯與縝密的推理雖然重要，動(dòng)人的情感表達(dá)更能讓你鶴立雞群。反過來說，如果狂讀、多思、討論的密集式學(xué)習(xí)能由個(gè)人或集體實(shí)現(xiàn)，用來替代國內(nèi)目前的松散式英語學(xué)習(xí)，美加還有必要去嗎？