2009年考研英語(yǔ)40篇大作文演練與名師點(diǎn)評(píng)

第十三篇

　　13 Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the picture;

　　2. interpret the meaning of the picture;

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　文章可以分四段來(lái)寫：第一段描述圖畫，第二段解釋產(chǎn)生該現(xiàn)象的原因，第三段講應(yīng)對(duì)問(wèn)題的策略，最后一段作總結(jié)。In the picture, a crab is most surprised when looking at a man walking forward.

　　It is not quite a challenging task for us to explain this phenomenon. To begin with, it is natural for different individuals to adopt different angles to look at the world and employ different methods to cope with problems, so we will find others�� opinions and behaviors hard to understand if we always look from our own perspective. Furthermore, to look down upon others or gossip about others�� private affairs can be largely attributed to self�瞔onceit. When we judge ourselves, we think of what we can do; but when we judge others, we think of what they have done. So it is likely for us to overestimate our own ability, and feel the impulse to complain and condemn in the name of truth and justice.

　　To solve this problem, the first step is to learn to control our own temper when facing again such “annoying” ideas or behaviors. When we calm down and analyze in depth what has happened, we are more likely to draw the reasonable conclusion. The next suggestion is to try to be strict with ourselves and tolerant of others at the same time—only in this way will it be possible for us to come to terms with the world. Another important point is that we should constantly develop and improve ourselves—when we endeavor to assimilate knowledge and accumulate experience, we will find it easier to have a calm mind and look at the world from a more balanced perspective.

　　How can a crab refrain from laughing at a man walking forward when it has run amuck for so many years? We are intelligent beings who should make constant progress by learning, reflection and communication. When we get to the top of the academic, corporate, or social ladder, it is more important for us to stand higher and higher and look down on the earthly affairs without easily expressing our opinions.第一段是對(duì)圖畫的描述，非常簡(jiǎn)潔。第二段共六句話，闡釋現(xiàn)象，在統(tǒng)領(lǐng)句后分兩點(diǎn)來(lái)說(shuō)。第一點(diǎn)說(shuō)不同的人在看待世界和解決問(wèn)題時(shí)采用不同的角度和方法是相當(dāng)自然的，所以當(dāng)我們從自己的角度出發(fā)時(shí)就會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)別人的觀點(diǎn)和行為難以理解。第二點(diǎn)說(shuō)藐視別人和閑聊別人的私事多是由于自負(fù)。當(dāng)我們?cè)u(píng)價(jià)自己時(shí)，想的是我們能做成什么；而評(píng)價(jià)別人時(shí)，想的是他們已經(jīng)做了什么。這樣做我們就容易高估自己的能力，而產(chǎn)生了以真理與正義之名來(lái)抱怨與責(zé)備的沖動(dòng)。

　　第三段說(shuō)解決問(wèn)題的辦法，分三點(diǎn)來(lái)說(shuō)。第一點(diǎn)是說(shuō)我們應(yīng)學(xué)會(huì)控制自己的脾氣。當(dāng)我們靜下心來(lái)深入分析的時(shí)候，我們便更有可能得出合理的結(jié)論。第二點(diǎn)是說(shuō)我們應(yīng)嚴(yán)格要求自己而非他人——只有這樣我們才可能與我們所生活的世界達(dá)成妥協(xié)。第三點(diǎn)是說(shuō)我們應(yīng)不斷提升自己——當(dāng)我們努力吸收知識(shí)和積累經(jīng)驗(yàn)時(shí)，我們將會(huì)更容易保持平和的心態(tài)，以更平衡的視角來(lái)看待這個(gè)世界。

　　最后一段是結(jié)語(yǔ)——如果前面寫得中規(guī)中矩，這一段可以使用一些特殊的手段來(lái)對(duì)文章的檔次做大幅的提升。該段共分三句。第一句是一個(gè)反問(wèn)句，呼應(yīng)文章的第一段：螃蟹橫行霸道多年，又怎么會(huì)不嘲笑直著走的人呢？該句的作用在于經(jīng)過(guò)討論之后，讓讀者產(chǎn)生巨大的共鳴——這一問(wèn)題已非常清楚了。第二句說(shuō)我們?nèi)耸怯兄腔鄣模瑧?yīng)當(dāng)通過(guò)學(xué)習(xí)、思考和交流不斷取得進(jìn)步。最后一句說(shuō)當(dāng)我們攀上學(xué)習(xí)、公司和社會(huì)階梯之巔時(shí)，我們應(yīng)站得更高，俯看世事，而不輕下結(jié)論。這句話是對(duì)第三段第三點(diǎn)的直接呼應(yīng)。后兩句話中均有平行結(jié)構(gòu)的用法，請(qǐng)用心體會(huì)。 越是看似簡(jiǎn)單的道理，大家越是應(yīng)該談深談透。

　　在一個(gè)段落里，分點(diǎn)寫作的時(shí)候，大家應(yīng)遵循一定的順序來(lái)寫，如在重要性上逐步增加等等。讀者在文章的結(jié)構(gòu)上遇到的麻煩越少，就越容易聚焦于文章的內(nèi)容。另外，上下文的呼應(yīng)會(huì)給讀者帶來(lái)潛意識(shí)的愉悅，是提高成績(jī)的好方法。