2009年考研英語40篇大作文演練與名師點評

第五篇

　　5 Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the picture；

　　2. interpret the meaning of the picture;

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　近年來大作文的潮流有二：一個是有關(guān)社會熱點問題的文章，另一個就是哲理性的文章。雖然到目前為止前者明顯多于后者，而且純粹的后一種類型的文章更少，但是我們認(rèn)為，隨著社會的發(fā)展和考試的演變，后一種類型的題目會越來越多。即使某篇文章不是純粹的哲理性的文章，其思辨性的層層深入和邏輯推理的加強仍很可能是未來的方向。

　　該題的這幅圖畫并不復(fù)雜，我們應(yīng)該配合圖下的一句話來看。第一段可以非常簡單地對圖進(jìn)行描述，并將圖下那句意味深長的話譯出。第二段應(yīng)對這句話進(jìn)行解釋。第三段聯(lián)系到日常生活中的現(xiàn)象。第四段是結(jié)論段。In the picture, a bird, resting on a branch, is looking up into the sky. Under the picture there is a sentence: “For the birds that cannot soar, God has provided low branches.”

　　I can�餿 help thinking a lot over this meaningful and thought�瞤rovoking proverb. It is natural for us to admire eagles that can fly high in the clouds, but there are fundamental differences between eagles and those little birds. While eagles are resting among the high mountains, little birds can always find their own low branches.

　　In my belief, this contrast resembles our real life in at least two aspects. In the first place, a person should come to terms with himself and the world around him. He should not be frustrated with what is beyond his reach. He should be content to go as far as he could. Moreover, we should never be afraid to give our best to what seemingly are little jobs. If we do such jobs well, the big ones tend to take care of themselves. Most people would succeed in small things if they were not troubled with great ambitions.

　　Up until now we finally realize that little birds that cannot soar can always find their own low branches and write their own life stories. It is magical and incredible for us to find that if we come to understand our own limits and try our best inside such limits, we may go beyond them and accomplish wonders eventually. 第一段非常簡練：第一句描述圖畫，第二句譯出圖下的那句話。這句話一定要譯好，因為它包含了圖畫中的深意，為下文的充分展開作鋪墊，是全文的關(guān)鍵。

　　第二段是對這句話的解釋，包含三句話。第一句是個常用句型，中間有形容詞的平行結(jié)構(gòu)。第二句突顯對比，說我們羨慕展翅高飛的雄鷹很正常，但是鷹與圖中所畫的小鳥是有根本區(qū)別的。當(dāng)鷹在群山間棲息之時，小鳥也總能找到屬于它們自己的低矮的樹枝。

　　第三段最為關(guān)鍵。這一段將鷹與小鳥的區(qū)別與我們的真實生活作了比較。首先，一個人應(yīng)該與他自己以及他周圍的世界達(dá)成妥協(xié)。他不應(yīng)該為超過他能力范圍的事煩惱，而應(yīng)該滿足于在能力許可的范圍內(nèi)取得最大的成功。這一點中的幾句話均來自《大學(xué)英語(修訂本)》第二冊第三課The Professor and the Yo�瞃o一文，該文以細(xì)膩的筆觸近距離地描述了Einstein作為普通人的一面，其中第二段給人留下了深刻的印象：

　　…He was the only person I knew who had come to terms with himself and the world around him. He knew what he wanted and he wanted only this: to understand within his limits as a human being the nature of the universe and the logic and simplicity in its functioning. He knew there were answers beyond his intellectual reach. But this did not frustrate him. He was content to go as far as he could.

　　我們借鑒該文，將其中精華提煉出來，放入我們的文章中。

　　第三段第二點說我們應(yīng)該永遠(yuǎn)都竭盡全力將小事做好——做好了小事，大事也就迎刃而解了。這句話中的take care of非常精彩，請大家細(xì)細(xì)品味。另舉幾句名言為例來看看take care of的精彩用法：

　　I recommend you to take care of the minutes, for the hours will take care of themselves. (Lord Chesterfield)

　　If I take care of my character, my reputation will take care of itself. (D.L.Moody)

　　If you go in for argument, take care of your temper. Your logic, if you have any, will take care of itself. (Joseph Farrell)

　　而后說，如果不被偉大的抱負(fù)困擾，大多數(shù)人將在小事上獲得成功。這一點中暗引了兩句名言：

　　Don�餿 be afraid to give your best to what seemingly are small jobs. Every time you conquer one it makes you that much stronger. If you do the little jobs well, the big ones tend to take care of themselves.(Dale Carnegie)

　　Most people would succeed in small things if they were not troubled with great ambitions.

　　(Henry Wadsworth Longfellow)

　　最后一段是結(jié)論段，共分兩句話。第一句話說，到現(xiàn)在為止我們終于理解了不能高飛的鳥兒也能找到屬于自己的低矮的樹枝、寫下自己人生故事的道理。該句中的平行結(jié)構(gòu)非常出彩。如果說平行之間見變化是直接獲得加分的高級技法，那么這里的變化并不在于長短的變化，而是具體與抽象、已知與未知的關(guān)系。最后一句又說到我們自己——這一句更進(jìn)一步，說如果我們了解了自身的局限并在此范圍內(nèi)竭盡所能的話，我們反而可能突破該限制，而最終創(chuàng)造奇跡。

　　這一段的精彩之處頗多。首先，這兩句話的層遞關(guān)系與第二段到第三段的層遞關(guān)系是相同的。其次，最后一句話頗有石破天驚的感覺，同時又是對第三段前面一半的隱性呼應(yīng)。Einstein正是由于能與自己和現(xiàn)實世界達(dá)成妥協(xié)，熟知自己的局限性而在此范圍內(nèi)傾力而為，所以創(chuàng)出驚人的成績。同樣地，如果我們了解自己的局限而盡力而為，也完全可能創(chuàng)造奇跡。這樣就從另一個角度深入解釋并積極拓展了圖中原句的涵義。同時該句也避免了達(dá)到過猶不及的地步，沒有說小鳥一定能變成雄鷹，到最高的天空飛翔。

　　最后一句中的accomplish wonders表示“創(chuàng)造奇跡”。該文哲理性很強。大家應(yīng)在平時養(yǎng)成思考問題的習(xí)慣，這樣考試中才能鎮(zhèn)定自若，游刃有余。反過來說，即使遇到自己不熟悉的題目，也不要著急。一定要相信自己，通過思考能夠圓滿地解決問題。