2009年考研英語40篇大作文演練與名師點(diǎn)評(píng)

第三篇

　　3 Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the picture；

　　2. interpret the meaning of the picture;

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　(注：圖片出自《諷刺與幽默》)這幅圖畫畫得非常好，突顯了兩個(gè)剛剛從大學(xué)畢業(yè)的女生之間的區(qū)別：一個(gè)急著去找工作，而另一個(gè)卻將文憑丟在一邊，急著去征婚。毫無疑問，出題者是想讓我們談?wù)劇凹奔抟蛔濉钡膯栴}。該文的結(jié)構(gòu)安排較為簡(jiǎn)單，可以分為三段來寫。第一段描述圖畫，第二段是解釋該現(xiàn)象的原因，第三段給出自己的看法。In the picture, there is a sharp contrast between two college graduates soon after they have got the diploma: one of them is planning to seek a job just as most students, while the other chooses to find her partner immediately, leaving the diploma behind. It is more than clear that the drawer wants to remind us of those girls who want to live a happy life by marrying a successful man instead of achieving success by her own hands.

　　I believe that two reasons account for the phenomenon. For one thing, after enrollment expansion, it is more and more difficult for university graduates, especially girls, to find an ideal job. Consequently, some of them hurry to find their partners for life as soon as they leave university. To make the matters worse, many companies and enterprises begin to enroll only men in recent years, even for many traditionally female�瞕ominated posts such as accountants and secretaries. For another, a view becomes more and more popular in the present society: it is more important for a woman to marry an ideal husband than to get a good job. Marrying an already successful man, in the eyes of many people, means gaining the access to instant wealth and a stable and carefree life. Under the influence of such a biased opinion, many girls take great efforts to get married upon graduation.

　　I myself don�餿 agree with this practice at all. On the one hand, job satisfaction is a large part of a person�餾 ultimate happiness, and women are no exception. On the other hand, a woman needs to get a job to be more confident, independent and open�瞞inded, and it will certainly make her more attractive as a potential marriage partner. Leo Tolstoy once said happy families are all alike, and I believe women in such families are both capable at work and back at home.第一段第一句話用冒號(hào)引出了兩個(gè)女生之間的區(qū)別，而后使用while突顯了這種對(duì)比。第二段趁熱打鐵地指出了繪畫者的意圖。這句話使用了句型“It is more than clear that…”，其中的more than起到了加強(qiáng)語氣的作用。后半句的定語從句實(shí)顯了句子的尾重(end weight)，突出文章的主題就是“急嫁一族”。從句中的instead of用得很精彩，突出了這些女孩子的想法，也呼應(yīng)了第一句話中的對(duì)比。

　　第二段從兩個(gè)方面來解釋這一現(xiàn)象。一方面說擴(kuò)招后大學(xué)畢業(yè)生，特別是女生，難找到理想的工作。更糟糕的是，有些公司與企業(yè)近年來開始只招男士。另一方面，“干得好不如嫁得好”的觀點(diǎn)越來越普遍。受這種有失偏頗的(biased)觀點(diǎn)影響，許多女孩在畢業(yè)后立即花大力氣找對(duì)象。本段末句中出現(xiàn)了對(duì)此現(xiàn)象的評(píng)價(jià)，這為下一段展開評(píng)述作了鋪墊。這一段中有許多好的詞句和句型，大家應(yīng)用心識(shí)記，并嘗試使用到自己的文章中。

　　第三段是典型的總——分——總結(jié)構(gòu)。第一句話斬釘截鐵地表示自己不同意這種做法。第二句話說工作帶來的滿足感是一個(gè)人最終幸福的重要組成部分，女性也不例外。工作和幸福感關(guān)系的名言還有：

　　When one gets to love work, life is a happy one.(John Ruskin)

　　Success in highest and noblest form calls for peace of mind and enjoyment and happiness which comes only to the man who has found the work he likes best.(Napoleon Hill)

　　Get happiness out of your work or you may never know what happiness is. (Elbert Hubbard)

　　第三句話說女人應(yīng)該工作，這樣能變得更自信、獨(dú)立和開明，而這會(huì)使她更有吸引力。句中使用了形容詞的平行結(jié)構(gòu)。最后一句引用名言，說明自己相信幸福家庭中的女性應(yīng)該是在工作和家庭中都能有出色表現(xiàn)的。托爾斯泰的話出自Anna Karenina的首句：Happy families are all alike; every unhappy family is unhappy in its own way.(Leo Tolstoy)最常見的提綱包含描述圖畫、闡釋含義和作出評(píng)論三個(gè)部分。對(duì)于社會(huì)現(xiàn)象這類較常見的題目，提綱也可能設(shè)置為描述圖畫、說明原因、提出解決辦法三個(gè)部分。

　　拿到提綱之后，應(yīng)該迅速作出正確的決定，文章應(yīng)該分成哪幾個(gè)部分。本文“急嫁一族”的社會(huì)現(xiàn)象，還遠(yuǎn)未成為亟待解決的社會(huì)痼疾，所以不必寫成提出解決辦法的段落，而應(yīng)該寫成表明自己態(tài)度的段落。

　　最后一段應(yīng)圍繞圖中人物展開，如果像下面這樣寫成對(duì)只招男士的企業(yè)的希望，沒有緊扣主題，就令人遺憾了：On the other hand, employers should treat male and female job applicants equally, as statistics show that there is no obvious difference between their performance at work.