2009年考研英語40篇大作文演練與名師點評

第二十二篇

　　22 Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the drawing,

　　2. interpret its meaning, and

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　該文可分為三段來寫。第一段描述圖畫。第二段從孩子和家長兩方面來描述圖畫中所展示的現(xiàn)象。第三段仍然從家長與孩子方面談這個問題的解決辦法。In the picture, we can see that the parents are filling in the college application forms while the child is indulged in playing computer games. This pheno�瞞enon, often seen in today�餾 families, deserves the attention from all of us.

　　This worrying phenomenon can be analyzed from two sides. On the one hand, the child, probably reaching the age of an adult, has never learned independence through all those years of education. He is completely absorbed in the game—it seems as if he never cared about his own future. On the other hand, the parents seem to enjoy getting everything ready for their child. Once in a while the child may raise a different suggestion, and they will try their best to persuade the child to accept their choice.

　　If we ever wish to find a sound solution for this problem, the joint efforts of the parents and the child are needed. On the one hand, the parents should create a relaxed environment for the child—they should employ various methods to help the child learn independence from a very young age. It is natural for parents to try to protect the child from pain and potential hazards, but how could the child grow up if he never met failure? The parents�� exclusive control over their child actually decreases the child�餾 chance to explore and enjoy the full range of human experiences. On the other hand, the child should bear a great aim in mind as early as possible. After learning attentively, thinking hard and practicing actively, it will be nearly certain for the child to develop strong interest in a certain field. If he chooses what he is really interested in, he will be happiest college student who is nearest to his dream.第一段對圖畫進行了描述。第二段的首句是統(tǒng)領(lǐng)句，引起下面兩個方面的闡述。第二、三句談的是孩子沒有學會獨立，對自己的未來毫不關(guān)心。第四、五句寫的是父母。他們似乎樂于為孩子準備好一切。偶爾孩子有不同意見，他們也會說服孩子接受他們的選擇。

　　第三段第一句說要解決這一問題，需要家長和孩子共同努力。然后從家長和孩子兩個方面分別來討論應(yīng)該如何去做。在讀圖構(gòu)思的階段我們應(yīng)當考慮一下文章的層次感。比如這篇文章，談的就是父母和孩子兩種截然不同的行為。從這個角度出發(fā)，可以非常均衡地構(gòu)造文章的第二段和第三段。這樣讀者在理解結(jié)構(gòu)上所花的時間就最少，注意力可以集中在語言和說理上。如果語言精彩，說理充分，文章就能獲得成功。

　　第三段的首句既把本段為方法段的性質(zhì)確定了下來，又確定了本段的結(jié)構(gòu)。當時間緊迫的時候，我們可以采用這種復合功能句。如果時間充裕，我們能夠在語言上做一些微調(diào)，就更完美了。