專項高分突破：名師幫你修改考研英語作文(4)

第三篇（Lminnie）

This picture is full of sadness and desperation.(,) (in which) T(t)he sun is about to fall down, (and) the earth is bared (barren), (and) the man with axe is walking towards to the survival(only) tree which bend(s) its branch just like take(\) a bow.

Why does the innocent tree doing so? (Is it) praying,(\) or begging? I think it's the(\) exactly (the) time we realized what a horrible mistake we (had) made. In order to meet our needs, we cut (down) the(\) trees, hunt the (\) wild animals, atc(etc). The earth is really(\) badly hurt.

Fortunately, it's never too late to correct our faults .We can take measures right now. First, the government should extend propaganda (publicity) to encourage the citizens protect our homeland, meanwhile, make some roles(actions should be taken) to punish the illegal merchants. Second, the merchants should improve their business ethic, (and) focus more on the space(surrounding) we live than money, (and) never make the money at the expense of envorinment(environment). Third, we citizens should do every little thing to make our world more clean and fresh.

Bending(Bended) trees would never appear if we do(take) these actions perfectly. Our beautiful earth is on his(the) way.

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