專項高分突破：名師幫你修改考研英語作文(3)

第五篇（ ChubbyKoala）

Directions

You want to contribute to Project Hope by offering financial aid to a child in a remote area. Write a letter to the department concerned, asking them to help find a candidate. You should specify what kind of child you want to help and how you will carry out your plan.

Write your letter with no less than 100 words. Write it on ANSWER SHEET 2.

Do not sign your name at the end of the letter; use "Li Ming" instead. You do not need to write the address.

To Whom It Will Concern:

　　I saw the Project Hope Ads on the newspaper, and want to make a contribution to whom he/she(\) needs it badly(in urgent needs).

　　I hope you (can) choose me(\) a candidate in a remote area whom(who) can not offer(afford) his/her education fees because of poverty. The candidate should be below age(\) 13, and his/her histosic(al) study records could prove he/she will be(him or her) a good student in the future. I will support(afford) all his(/her) education fees and the cost(everyday expenses) in school until he(/she) finish his/her(\) high school,(.)if he/she gets the oppotunity (opportunity) to go to college,i(I) will support it go(\) on(I will keep on affording the college tuition).

Looking forward to your reply.

Sincerely,

Li Ming

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