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Dear Mr Annan:

I'm very glad to write to you. I'm a common college student in China. I think that there is a good chance to tell my images about the world peace to you.

At present ,world are quickly developing not only in Asia,Europe,Amcrican but also in Afican.But as histroic and particuraly reason,there are many unpeaceful places in the world.Such as Araqi and Afican.

there are also in the war.I think most people in the world like the peace ,but why too many countries are unpeaceful?In my opinon, we needn't take care of the reanson cause to wars.we should need UN to help these countries to escape from wars.

As its famous,UN should be as a authority at preventing the war and keeping peace.UN should announce to the world our determine against the war!We must have a faith:UN is a big family,all the states on the Earth are brothers,no matter develeping countries and develeped cuntries,no matter poor man and rich man,we can't choose nationalitys,peoples and hometowns,but we can choose the peace .If all the people follow this faith,a new world will apper in the furture.And UN is a really globe viilage at that time!

yours Eric

Mar 12 2004

錯誤：

1. I'm a common college student in China. / I'm an average college student in China.

2. I think that there is a good chance to tell my images about the world peace to you./ I think this is a good chance to tell my opinions about……..

3. world are quickly developing not only in Asia,Europe,Amcrican but also in Afican / the world is developing quickly not only in Asia, Europe, America but also in Africa.

4. But as histroic and particuraly reason,there are many unpeaceful places in the world.Such as Araqi and Afica / But for historical and some particular reasons, there are many unpeaceful places in the world, such as Iraq and some African countries.

5. As its famous,UN should be as a authority at preventing / As a famous organization, the Un should be an authority on preventing

6. ,no matter poor man and rich man / no matter poor men or rich men

7. apper / appear

8. globe viilage / global village

Venuswang：

This is my compostion:

Dear Mr. Kofi Annan, Nov.27th. 2004

I am a junior who admire you immensely. As a Chinese college student from Beijing Material Institute, I have been concerning much about the current situation of world peace for a long time.

Much to my regret, it still exists much confliction, terror as well as warfare through out the world. When I heard out or read international news as to gunfight or brutality, the most impressive and unforgettable scenes coming into my mind are a great deal of innocent expressions in helpless children’s eyes. I can't imagine what is the true world would be like in their naive heart. As far as the children are concerned, they really want a happy and wonderful childhood without any wickedness. Therefore, I sincerely hope that everyone could live in a peaceful world rather than a horrible one in the foreseeable future.

We have only one world and anyone who eager for peace in this world advice that U.N. should make great efforts not only to pay more attention but also take effective matures to cope with this situation. Only in this way can we own a beautiful world which I am looking forward to all the time.

Yours Sincerely,

Venus

錯誤：

1. I have been concerning much about the current situation of world peace for a long time. / I have concerned about….

2. through out the world. / throughout the world.

3. When I heard out or read international news as to gunfight or brutality / When I heard out or read international news about gunfight or brutality

4. I can't imagine what is the true world would be like in their naive heart. / I can't imagine what the true world would be like in their naive heart.

5. anyone who eager for peace in this world advice that U.N. should make great efforts / anyone who is eager for …. advise…

寫的很好！