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Dear mr kofi annan:

I am a sophomore in the Biology Department of china. I am writing to you about some opinon in the world peace.

Recent years,some countrys are involed in war. More and more people have no food and houses. When we see a 13-year- old girl who lost her leg,because of the afraid war.We are appealing " we must stop war".

Unition country agency is a very important in the world peace. It can promots the world peace process . I sincerely hope that the union country agency will try the best on the world peace.All of us will appreaciate it.Thank you.

yours sincerely

anna

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1. I am a sophomore in the Biology Department of china / I am a Chinese college student majoring in Biology.

2. I am writing to you about some opinon in the world peace. / I am writing to you to express some opinions about the world peace.

3. Recent years,some countrys are involed in war / In recent years, some countries are involved in wars.

4. When we see a 13-year- old girl who lost her leg,because of the afraid war.We are appealing " we must stop war" / When we see a 13-year- old girl who lost her leg because of the horrifying war, we are appealing " we must stop war"

5. Unition country agency is a very important in the world peace / The UN is a very important organization in promoting world peace.

6. promots / promote

7. All of us will appreaciate it / … appreciate

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