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Dear friends,
I’m writing to you, on behalf of the student union, to ask for help for our schoolmate, Li Ming. He’s seriously ill and has to have a lung transplant at once. To make things worse, he comes from the west of our country, which means that his family is quite poor.
Li Ming is now confronted with the following difficulties. To begin with, he can’t afford the medical expenses. His family doesn’t have a good financial background and moreover, his parents have already borrowed a lot of money to send him to university. In view of their low income and severe financial situation, we hope you can show our sympathy. In addition, his family is far away and he needs someone to take care of him day and night instead of his parents who are thousands of miles from here. Only under careful care can our friend recover from his disease.
On no account can we see our friend suffer without giving him a hand! He’s in desperate need of your help, especially in financial donations to help pay his expenses. Anyone who wants to offer help can contact us at 55780063 or you can email us by john@sohu.com. Please!
Yours,
John
Chairman of the Student Union
本文特點
第一段, 作者開門見山,直接把最后兩個要素在第一段就標明,即生病的是學生,要代表學生會――“on behalf of the student union, to ask for help for our schoolmate”。然后,用兩句話就說清病情和家庭情況。并且用了一個較少能見的鏈接短語“To make things worse”。
第二段, 列舉困難直接把中心句放在段首,本段的基本結(jié)構(gòu)可以這樣認為:“Li Ming is now confronted with the following difficulties.”+ “To begin with”+“moreover”+“In addition”。并且,使用比較地道的短語be confronted with. 一般來說,短語優(yōu)先原則是一個比較好的策略。本段中,盡管作者很少使用從句,但并列句和短語的使用是較多的,“a lot of,In view of,far away,take care of,recover from”。
第三段, 首尾屬于傳統(tǒng)事務(wù)信函的套路。兩層意思,一是呼吁捐助,二是聯(lián)系方式。呼吁捐助的段首句采用倒裝,使文章的句式有了不少變化。盡管全文的從句量不多,但句式變化多,如并列句、倒裝句、無主句。并且全文的短語使用較多且地道。
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Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Rising Divorce Rates in China. You must base your composition on the following graph and outline (given in Chinese)
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