2011年12月英語四級作文范文評析(高分版)

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　　Part I Writing

　　點評：

　　本次四級作文探討的話題是成功與毅力之間的關(guān)系，話題不算新，一般考生對此都比較熟悉，所以對考生來說難度不大。寫好這篇作文，需要抓住兩點，一是緊跟題目要求，即對上述幽默性的話語做出評論，二是在評論的基礎上要亮出自己的觀點。

　　范文開頭第一句即一針見血地對上述幽默性話語做出總結(jié)性概括，即戒煙看似簡單實則很難，隨后指出該話語本質(zhì)上是一個悖論，并且以一個“水滴石穿”的俗語來指出困難所在，這句也是本文的一個亮點，體現(xiàn)作者在西方俗語方面豐富的知識儲備。

　　第二段作者則進一步深入分析該話語，指出做某事在短期看來很容易，長期來看，恰恰相反，人們做事的結(jié)果也因此總是失敗，原因則在最后一句點出：缺乏毅力。

　　第三段作者進一步給出了自己的觀點，告訴大家如何避免陷入這種兩難境地：首要條件即需要堅強的意志和長期的堅持。最后再以艾默生的一句名言 “沒人能夠騙你遠離你最終的成功，除非你自己承認失敗”來總結(jié)全文，切中主題，鏗鏘有力。

　　【高分范文】

　　Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will

　　As we have read from above, quitting-smoking seems easy, but in reality it is rarely achieved. There is something provoking and interesting in this paradox, just because sword does not wear the stone as dripping water does.

　　The ability to do something over and over again in a short time may imply its easiness, but in a long run, a lifetime maybe, things turn out to be quite the opposite. Also, as is often the case, one may have obtained all the tools and opportunities to achieve something, but in the end they still fail due to the will shortage.

　　So how could we avoid the dilemma? Here is the prime condition of success: will and perseverance. Concentrate you energy, thought and mind exclusively on the business in which you are engaged, hang on in there and be patient, for, as Emerson put it, no one can cheat you out of your ultimate success but yourself.