I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.

exceedingly 替換 very

thrilling 替換 exciting

sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替換 sb. be interested in sth.

google 替換 search

an army of 替換 a lot of

The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!

The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一個精彩句型，用來描述在某個時期發(fā)生了什么事情；

Increasing popularity 替換 more and more popular

Coincident with … 非常地道的句型，表達“與…一致”的意思，替換 With …

Advancement 替換 development

Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替換 enter into

Current ( currently )替換 now

Appeal to sb. 替換 sb. be interested in sth.

Growing individuals 替換 more and more people

It is no exaggeration to say 經典句型， 說某事是毫不夸張的

For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.

For a start 替換 To begin with

We can, freely, search 用了插入語的寫作手法

our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被動

Additionally 替換 In addition / Besides

Deliver 替換 send

There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.

There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, 這個句子有三個精彩之處，首先There is no denying that這個句型，還有however作為插入語， function in the disservice of 替換 do harm to

Emerging 替換 appearing ( fading 替換 disappearing )

Net citizen 網民，屬于精彩用詞

As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.

No garden has no weeds 替換 Every coin has two sides

Computers do play ，do 強調

Positive 替換 important / good 等

A slice of 替換 a part of

Unfavorable 替換 bad

Impacts 替換 effects / influences

We should, therefore, take advantage of … 使用插入語

Fruits 而且fruits 用的非常形象， merits/ virtues) 替換 advantage ( defects 替換 disadvantage )

Facet 替換 aspect

各位同學，上面的作文里有這么多精彩的閃光點，作文怎么會不得高分呢！

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