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　　考研英語作文考場范文：啃老族

　　As is vividly depicted in the picture, a father has received a letter from his son, on which without anything except(改為but)a word: money. It reveals a serious issue of (改為in)our society: more and more people live off their parents, even if they are old enough. We call the people who is(建議刪掉，直接用簡單句表達即可) “boomerang kids”.A careful analysis of cartoon may reveals some reasons under the problem, which involves three causes. For one thing,Chinese parents indulge their children so that it takesfew(改為little，few修飾可數(shù)名詞，little修飾不可數(shù)名詞) time to develop their children(改為children’s，孩子們的) independence. In addition(建議改為For another，與前面For one thing對應起來), the boomerang kids may never realize the hard working and enterprising spirit is(改為are，賓語從句的主語用and連接，謂語動詞用復數(shù))a magic weapon to make their life pleasant, efficient ,(加and)successful. Last but not least, the education in our school ,especailly(拼寫錯誤，改為especially)university, attach(改為attaches) more importance to academic marks, which ignores the significance of students’ independence ablilty(拼寫錯誤，改為ability).In order to solve these issues, both family and school should join hands to create an free atmosphere to spirit the young people take care of themselves, while at the same time, the boomerang kids(改為kids’) efforts are indispensible, (加and，兩個句子之間用連詞連接)they should change the lazy behaviors. To conclude my essay, I would like to quote an old saying “a young idler, an old beggar”.

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