考試吧：2014考研英語(yǔ)小作文優(yōu)秀范文賞析

　　考研英語(yǔ)待批改作文：

　　8-10分

　　第一篇

　　Dear Tommy,

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you timely returning admission ticket to me.

　　If it had not been for your assistance in warmheartedly picking up my admission ticket and getting it back to me, I fear that I would have been missed my law exam held for once a year.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who came to help me and saved me from the trouble. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Jane Yang

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Tommy,

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you timely returning admission ticket to me.

　　If it had not been for your assistance in warmheartedly picking up my admission ticket and getting it back to me, I fear that I would have been missed(改為missing) my law exam held for once a year.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who came to help me and saved me from the trouble. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Jane Yang

　　8分

　　同學(xué)你好，作文寫的很不錯(cuò)，但是要注意虛擬語(yǔ)氣的用法，建議再?gòu)?fù)習(xí)一下。

　　8-10分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Eleven

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my Olympic Game in Maths. I fear that I would have been give it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Eleven，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my (加上study of)Olympic Game in Maths(奧數(shù)是Mathematic Olympiad ). I fear that I would have been give(改為giving) it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　8分

　　同學(xué)你好，這篇小作文整體來講寫的不錯(cuò)。建議你如果遇到某些不確定但又不是非常重要的專有名詞，可以改為其他有把握的詞，例如本篇作文中提到的奧數(shù)，完全可以改為其他的比賽。

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