一、避免使用語意弱的“be”動(dòng)詞。 1、把句中的表語轉(zhuǎn)換為不同的修飾語。
例如：
Weak： The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision：The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. （轉(zhuǎn)換為前置定語）
Or： The landscape， bare and brown， begged for spring green. （轉(zhuǎn)換為并列結(jié)構(gòu)作后置定語）
2、將作表語用的形容詞或名詞變?yōu)樾袨閯?dòng)詞。
例如：
1） Weak： The team members are good players.
Revision： The team members play well.
2） Weak： One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
Revision： One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
3、在以“here”或“there”開頭的句子中，把“be”動(dòng)詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫句的主語。例如：
1） Weak： There is no opportunity for promotion.
Revision： No opportunity for promotion exists.
2） Weak： Here are the books you ordered.
Revision： The books you ordered have arrived.
二、多用語意具體的動(dòng)詞，保持句意簡潔明了。 例如：
1、Poor： My supervisor went past my desk.
Better： My supervisor sauntered （=walked slowly） past my desk.
2、Poor： She is a careful shopper.
Better： She compares prices and quality.
三、盡量運(yùn)用主動(dòng)語態(tài)。 例如：
1、Weak： The organization has been supported by charity.
Better： Charity has supported the organization.
2、Weak： The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better： Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
四、防止使用語意冗長累贅的詞語。 例如：
1、Wordy： My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved： My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
2、Wordy： We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved： We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
3、Redundant： We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
Improved： We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
4、Redundant： My sister and I bought the same， identical dress in different stores.
Improved： My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語或難懂的專業(yè)術(shù)語。 例如：
1、Weak： They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved： They will not agree to any of his proposals.
2、Weak： I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
Improved： I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
