2010年6月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)考試寫(xiě)作思路突破(3)

　　本文的說(shuō)明原因段可分為如下三個(gè)層次進(jìn)行論證：

　　①開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山：首先對(duì)“綠色校園”在下文要涉及的內(nèi)容進(jìn)行總體概括：The idea of “a green campus” is beyond a green environment.

　　②正面論證：說(shuō)明“綠色校園”的第一層含義，也就是我們最熟知的一層含義，即campus construction refers to green environment preservation and protection。然后舉例進(jìn)一步解釋此含義，并強(qiáng)調(diào)其重要性：which makes campus an ecological and natural resort.在這個(gè)過(guò)程中考生要注意亮點(diǎn)詞匯以及句型的使用。

　�、鄯疵嬲撟C：使用in addition to引出“綠色校園”的第二層含義，即create a civilized atmosphere for the sake of students’ mental health.然后舉例進(jìn)一步解釋此含義。如：For example, students will be severely punished in case of cheating in exams and plagiarizing in academic papers.

　　3.解決方法段 鑒于“綠色校園”的重要性，說(shuō)明采取措施的必要性，如：To bring “green campus” to its full play, effective measures should be taken.

　　常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題：用語(yǔ)過(guò)于直白或極端。如：We must…/ We should…等。

　　使用對(duì)策：要站在中庸的立場(chǎng)上，客觀地提出建議，可使用一些表示客觀立場(chǎng)的詞語(yǔ)，如：It is essential that …; Only by the co�瞖fforts of the whole society could “green campus” work smoothly.這樣使自己的觀點(diǎn)表達(dá)得既委婉又客觀。

　　Creating A Green Campus

　　Nowadays the topic of a green campus has been widely debated which has aroused public attention.Undoubtedly, a green campus, the indispensable part for the development of college students, has a profound impact on both individuals and society, for its significance cannot be denied.

　　The idea of “a green campus” is beyond a green environment.To begin with, campus construction refers to green environment preservation and protection, such as planting more trees and flowers, which makes campus an ecological and natural resort, and advocating green products.For example, students are encouraged to avoid using disposable plastic containers in campus dining hall and recycle wasted batteries and other electrical products properly.In addition to the environmentally friendly practice, we shall make every effort to improve the moral standard and ethical level of university students in order to create a civilized atmosphere for the sake of students’ mental health.For example, students will be severely punished in case of cheating in exams and plagiarizing in academic papers.

　　To bring “green campus” to its full play, effective measures should be taken.First, based on its education function, campus should bring the theory of “sustainable development” into classrooms, set environmental management rules and conduct environmental education activities.Second, it is essential that law and regulations be worked out and enforced by the government and school authorities.Only by the co-efforts of the whole society could “green campus” work smoothly and bring benefit to people’s well-beings.

　　(四)修改潤(rùn)色

　　作文基本完成以后，主要有以下兩項(xiàng)任務(wù)：

　　1.檢查

　　檢查是否包含考卷提綱列出的所有信息;各段落銜接是否連貫，使用In the first place, Furthermore, On the one hand， For instance， On the other hand等詞可以達(dá)到這種效果;語(yǔ)法上單詞拼寫(xiě)上是否有誤，如較長(zhǎng)單詞indispensable，environmentally friendly，preservation，plagiarizing等，以及短語(yǔ)has a profound impact on，disposable plastic containers，in case of，bring …to its full play, bring benefit to以及最后一段中虛擬語(yǔ)氣、倒裝句使用是否正確。避免使用“漢語(yǔ)式英語(yǔ)”;檢查文章標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是否正確。

　　2.潤(rùn)色

　　例如：Only by the co�瞖fforts of the whole society could “green campus” work smoothly and bring benefit to people’s well�瞓eings中使用倒裝句的結(jié)構(gòu)，凸顯考生的語(yǔ)法功底。